Surfacing briefly to say

[rivkat]

Never, never put yourself in a position where you write this sentence:

"He genuinely liked the young Warlord, but that didn't mean he thought he would listen to him."

Pronoun whiplash!

Comments

[herohunter.livejournal.com]

*nods*
Yes, I see it...

[kickair8p.livejournal.com]

A bit awkward, but not actually confusing. Much. ::g::





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[ter369.livejournal.com]

It's worse in a sex scene. Whose what did that to which?

Glad to see you surface!

[rivkat.livejournal.com]

It's not that I don't understand the problem -- who wants to keep using proper names or, worse, epithets? -- but the solution is not that sentence.

Happy birthday!